M5M 2T4
4 December 2007
Mr. Dave Budden
Director of Admissions and Assistant Head of
M2L 1A2
Dear Mr. Budden,
I am currently a student at The Sterling Hall School which I have been attending since Grade 1. This year in Grade 8, I have earned the role of Athletic Prefect which I am thrilled about. This is my first choice of schools and you have received my application. We first met on Tuesday December 11 for our interview. Crescent is my school of choice because I would be a great asset to Crescent and I have a growing interest in your school and all it has to offer.
I feel I would be a great asset to your school because I am an all-round, talented student. I am continuously at the top of my class academically, I play the alto and tenor sax for SHS’s “Intermediate Band”, I am very athletic, and I am a leader. Since Grade 1, I have won the Proficiency Award for academic excellence 6 times which took a lot of hard work and determination. Last year I participated in the CISMF Concert Band at Roy Thomson Hall as a 2nd alto saxophone. This year, I am participating except as a 1st alto saxophone! As stated earlier, I am the Athletic Prefect. I lead 4 Athletic Captains and 2 Sports Captains. I am also the U14 SHS basketball team captain. In school I participate on a team every term and outside of school I play tennis once a week, ski on the weekends, and used to play Provincial level soccer until I switched over to baseball this year. Also, I am a positive influence in the classroom, I participate in class discussions, and I get along with my classmates. This is why I feel I am right for your school.
I also have an keen interest in
In conclusion, I feel Crescent is the school for me and I would fit in perfectly. I am already friends with numerous students in Grade 8 currently at
Sincerely,
Alex Mahoney
3 comments:
alex i have posted once but it got deleted so i am really pissed off!!
This will be a little bit brief
dear budden , not :
The setances at the begining are long
may want to shorten
Youve already had interview
change present tense to past
Reid says hi
bye
adam
haha yeye kk
but wat sentences??
and im not gonnna change that because the date on the letter is before the interview so it wouldnt make sense
i think it was a solid letter i would nly mention to maybe check your formality and the time tense
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