It tumbles through the hoop,
no celebration, time to regroup,
we get a steal,
this is surreal,
this is our core group
This poem is about basketball, it says that if you score a basket, maybe you'll wanto celebrate it, but you can't because the game is close and you have to go on full court press, and the whole team is focused, they'll get a steal, because of their excitement, interest in the game, their core group is their team and the team is all really close to each other.
no celebration, time to regroup,
we get a steal,
this is surreal,
this is our core group
This poem is about basketball, it says that if you score a basket, maybe you'll wanto celebrate it, but you can't because the game is close and you have to go on full court press, and the whole team is focused, they'll get a steal, because of their excitement, interest in the game, their core group is their team and the team is all really close to each other.
2 comments:
-alex this is a very good poem and i dont think you even need to change it i really like it and think you did a great job
Alex
Great Poem
The first three lines are great... but i am not feeling the same passion in the last 2 lines
The world Zeal i dont really understand. It seems like an air word, i think you need a juicier word.
Other wise its great
the final line could be a little stornger
but overall its good
SAM
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